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Change Your Life, Sister To Wife
A young man lost in a materialistic lifestyle remembers his family and is inspired to reconnect with the world by a mysterious woman.
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Change Your Life - Draft Version
A young man lost in a materialistic lifestyle is reminded of his supportive family by a sister who inspires him to change his life and reconnect with the world.
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Change Your Life, Sister To Wife - Completed
A young financier trying to run with the rich crowd is inspired by a sister to repent, start a charity and reconnect with his family and himself.
Rudi, a well-dressed young man, is seated at a large, round table at an upscale restaurant, looking tired and lost. Ambient noise of a raucous scene can be heard, and then fades. Cue music.
Rotate around the table to see Rudi's friends laughing, eating and drinking. Stop on a pretty blonde woman who pauses to answer her cell phone with an over-ear headset. Continue to pan around the table to the rest of the party, settling back on Rudi who forces a smile and enters the conversation.
The entourage barrels out the door into the night and turns down the lighted sidewalk, running past bars and clubs with Rudi in tow. A light rain begins to fall as they enter a coffee bar with a sign that says "The Bohemian."
Rudi picks up a glass of wine at the counter and turns to see Mimi standing nearby with a mug of coffee in her hands. They look at each other in surprise with big smiles. They instinctively walk up to each other and exchange a brief, emphatic greeting. Mimi motions Rudi to join her in a private booth.
They sit down and Rudi tries to charm her with some line, but she frowns. She gently, but directly begins to lecture him. Astonished, he looks down in apprehension. She pulls out a photograph and shows it to Rudi as she explains. Rudi looks at a happy portrait of his parents, him and Mimi, and rolls his eyes a bit. Then his expression changes to thoughtfulness and an acknowledgement of fond recollection. She implores him to keep it and hands it to him, and then leaves concerned and disappointed. He is left looking down at the table immersed in thought.
Rudi walks down the street in the morning with a crowd of professionally-dressed people on their way to work downtown. Many appear uncomfortable, disinterested, and labored. Some look snobby and rich. Rudi looks longingly at a fluorescent race yellow sports car, and then repentantly shakes his head.
At his cubicle in an office building, Rudi is concentrating intensely on a spreadsheet on his computer monitor. He loses focus, and turns to look at a framed picture on his desk.
Rudi confidently gives a presentation with projected slides in a conference room to a variety of mostly older and senior businesspeople. He fields questions and tries to answer them, but does so unsuccessfully.
Rudi rushes back to his cubicle to look at the family picture, but Mimi is no longer in it. In horror, Rudi rifles through his rolodex, then scrolls through his cell phone in vain. Rudi looks at the picture again, where he and his parents now wear neutral expressions. Shocked and desperate, Rudi quickly leaves the office. He rushes back to the coffee bar at dusk to look for Mimi to no avail.
At night, Rudi attends a formal corporate social event, but is alone. Determined and focused, he rushes out as one of his female friends looks disappointed to see him leave. He heads out the door, into the rain, down the street, chasing after a taxi. Rudi gets out of the cab in front of the coffee bar and rushes in.
He spots Mimi and smiles. She notices him but tries to ignore him. He puts his thick metal watch down on a table, where it is quickly pilfered. Rudi undoes his tie and drops it on the floor. He tries to speak with Mimi, but she rebuffs him and turns her attention back to her friends. He persists. Mimi finally engages him, and they start laughing and enjoying themselves.
Enthralled with each other, Rudi and Mimi leave the coffee bar holding hands loosely and running out into the rain together.
Rudi and Mimi are working in a shared office. Back out the door to reveal a placard that reads "Jack and Jill Charities."
A large group of festive people of all ages gather. They warmly, ecstatically and audibly interact with each other before posing for a camera. Pause to a still shot, closing in to frame an image of Rudi, Mimi, and parents.
Rotate around the table to see Rudi's friends laughing, eating and drinking. Stop on a pretty blonde woman who pauses to answer her cell phone with an over-ear headset. Continue to pan around the table to the rest of the party, settling back on Rudi who forces a smile and enters the conversation.
The entourage barrels out the door into the night and turns down the lighted sidewalk, running past bars and clubs with Rudi in tow. A light rain begins to fall as they enter a coffee bar with a sign that says "The Bohemian."
Rudi picks up a glass of wine at the counter and turns to see Mimi standing nearby with a mug of coffee in her hands. They look at each other in surprise with big smiles. They instinctively walk up to each other and exchange a brief, emphatic greeting. Mimi motions Rudi to join her in a private booth.
They sit down and Rudi tries to charm her with some line, but she frowns. She gently, but directly begins to lecture him. Astonished, he looks down in apprehension. She pulls out a photograph and shows it to Rudi as she explains. Rudi looks at a happy portrait of his parents, him and Mimi, and rolls his eyes a bit. Then his expression changes to thoughtfulness and an acknowledgement of fond recollection. She implores him to keep it and hands it to him, and then leaves concerned and disappointed. He is left looking down at the table immersed in thought.
Rudi walks down the street in the morning with a crowd of professionally-dressed people on their way to work downtown. Many appear uncomfortable, disinterested, and labored. Some look snobby and rich. Rudi looks longingly at a fluorescent race yellow sports car, and then repentantly shakes his head.
At his cubicle in an office building, Rudi is concentrating intensely on a spreadsheet on his computer monitor. He loses focus, and turns to look at a framed picture on his desk.
Rudi confidently gives a presentation with projected slides in a conference room to a variety of mostly older and senior businesspeople. He fields questions and tries to answer them, but does so unsuccessfully.
Rudi rushes back to his cubicle to look at the family picture, but Mimi is no longer in it. In horror, Rudi rifles through his rolodex, then scrolls through his cell phone in vain. Rudi looks at the picture again, where he and his parents now wear neutral expressions. Shocked and desperate, Rudi quickly leaves the office. He rushes back to the coffee bar at dusk to look for Mimi to no avail.
At night, Rudi attends a formal corporate social event, but is alone. Determined and focused, he rushes out as one of his female friends looks disappointed to see him leave. He heads out the door, into the rain, down the street, chasing after a taxi. Rudi gets out of the cab in front of the coffee bar and rushes in.
He spots Mimi and smiles. She notices him but tries to ignore him. He puts his thick metal watch down on a table, where it is quickly pilfered. Rudi undoes his tie and drops it on the floor. He tries to speak with Mimi, but she rebuffs him and turns her attention back to her friends. He persists. Mimi finally engages him, and they start laughing and enjoying themselves.
Enthralled with each other, Rudi and Mimi leave the coffee bar holding hands loosely and running out into the rain together.
Rudi and Mimi are working in a shared office. Back out the door to reveal a placard that reads "Jack and Jill Charities."
A large group of festive people of all ages gather. They warmly, ecstatically and audibly interact with each other before posing for a camera. Pause to a still shot, closing in to frame an image of Rudi, Mimi, and parents.
Comments (18)
Griff Thanks unn, Paul and David for the feedback!
October 22, 2008I just added a 3-page scene breakdown as suggested by therasoft. It's the last day before finalists are announced, but I'm having too much fun with this!
David Mulholland Nice pitch, Griff. I checked out the finished pitch. I enjoyed the upbeat story that this pitch told. I also appreciate the stick figures. More evidence that you don't need to know how to draw to tell a good story! ;) Great job!
October 22, 2008Paul Wallace Griff - great pitch! The story is uplifting and compelling, and the visual direction is captivating. Your focus on narrative is important here - not just the whos and whats of the story, but that you've paid close attention to the meanings behind your characters' actions and emotions.
October 21, 2008From your pitch video it's clear that you have a nuanced understanding of the manifest content of the song. There very much is a sublimated desire inherent in the lyrics, where one is unsure if this "sister" is a literal sister, a lover, or just an archetypal female object of desire. I like how your pitch recognizes this, and lets the story play to either interpretation.
Most importantly, I like the uplifting message of your pitch. Well done, good sir.
Bryan Yomjinda Well refined concept. It seems you've put a lot of thought into putting the pitch together. The storyboard is well executed, simple but definitely got the story across well.
October 17, 2008Griff Cool, I just figured out how to upload new assets. 3 Pitch videos and a revised treatment. Check it out!
October 17, 2008Griff Whoops, I meant:
October 10, 2008http://www.massify.com/pitches/changecompleted.
This is the polished version to see!
Griff Thanks everyone for the feedback! I have added 3 videos to:
October 10, 2008http://www.massify.com/pitches/changeyourlife
This concept is really coming into being. Too bad I didn't get it all polished in time for this "officially submitted version." Hopefully the treatment and visuals grab folks, even if they don't look at the "completed" version.
But that completed version rocks, and I might even shoot it regardless of the outcome of this contest. Put it up on YouTube as a mashup before the official winning video sees the light of day.
Either way, this band is going to make it on the strength of this great song. It would just be so much sweeter with this story. "And the MTV Music Award for best video goes to..."
Tyler D Lucas Field, the lead singer of LVD, would LOVE this pitch. Especially the completed version you refer to in your comment. The song audio goes great with the storyboard - how did you ever work out the timing?
October 9, 2008Thematically, it is consistent with the "Heart Attack" video, focusing on taking action to change your life for the better and finding your soul mate. This is just a straight cinematic story we can all relate to. No need for a band performance (per se), or lip synching - that stuff is mickey mouse music video technique that I am so sick of seeing.
This is a movie. You could do a short or feature based on this concept. And there are no gimmicks here - that is for poseurs, and ultimately doesn't find purchase in an audience. This story respects the audience, and even challenges them a bit with the sister identity angle.
Absolutely incredible. This is a fresh concept that surpasses most of what I see in the imagination-strapped industry.
Rowdy Favoriting Griff's "Change Your Life, Sister To Wife" is the inverse of adverse selection. This one shows clearly a lyrical symmetry that opens the song for us and brings it to life unobtrusively in his interpretation. In pitching, there are fastballs, curveballs, sinkers, and sliders. Then there is the changeup. Well done, let them take a swing at this one.
October 9, 2008Lorena I think is a great concept, it will definetely work out because it's a "Organic Product" lol... it's pretty earthy, realistic, warm and it totally CATCHES VISUAL ATTENTION, it's simple but explains everything so crearly and you don't get to see this kind of things anymore (old school) "very-sadly".... so, Congrats and best luck!!!!!
October 9, 2008