Orange Peel
After his mother dies, a man who has been home-schooled and sheltered from society his entire life is forced to make his way in the world.
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The story begins in the 1980. PEEL MUNTER, age 5, is the youngest of three boys. After his father leaves, taking Peel's two older brothers with him, Peel is left alone with his mentally unstable mother.
Jump to 2010. Peel still lives with his mom, living much the same life as he did at age 5. He eats spaghettios, drinks tang, and snorkels in the backyard pool. He caters to his mom's every need, from changing the channel to cutting her toe nails. Peel doesn't seem to mind this existence; he simply doesn't know any better. Home-schooled, brainwashed and breastfed until age 10, Peel never got a driver's license or even a job. When his mom suddenly dies, Peel's life is turned upside-down.
Left with a mortgage, no savings and no life skills, Peel searches for roommates. What he finds are ROY, a degenerate gambler, and his Spanish-speaking drunk friend Carlos -- aka “CHUCK”. Roy has visions of turning the run-down San Fernando Valley home with a dingy backyard swimming pool into a poor man’s version of the “Playboy Mansion”. He convinces Peel to rent out the last room to CHAD, a good-looking college student – with the idea that he will attract young women to their bachelor pad. The plan quickly backfires when they discover that Chad is gay.
Despite the odd mixture of characters living together under one roof, all things seem to be going well until Roy sleeps with Peel's Korean neighbor and crush, CHUN-JA. Feeling lost and betrayed, Peel ventures off to find his long lost brothers. From New Mexico to Las Vegas, Peel starts to learn that there’s a whole world out there and everything his mother had told him about his father and brothers was a lie. In the end, Peel finds a family that he never knew he was missing.
Here’s a link to a short film I made with the same character, different story: http://www.vimeo.com/1317116
Jump to 2010. Peel still lives with his mom, living much the same life as he did at age 5. He eats spaghettios, drinks tang, and snorkels in the backyard pool. He caters to his mom's every need, from changing the channel to cutting her toe nails. Peel doesn't seem to mind this existence; he simply doesn't know any better. Home-schooled, brainwashed and breastfed until age 10, Peel never got a driver's license or even a job. When his mom suddenly dies, Peel's life is turned upside-down.
Left with a mortgage, no savings and no life skills, Peel searches for roommates. What he finds are ROY, a degenerate gambler, and his Spanish-speaking drunk friend Carlos -- aka “CHUCK”. Roy has visions of turning the run-down San Fernando Valley home with a dingy backyard swimming pool into a poor man’s version of the “Playboy Mansion”. He convinces Peel to rent out the last room to CHAD, a good-looking college student – with the idea that he will attract young women to their bachelor pad. The plan quickly backfires when they discover that Chad is gay.
Despite the odd mixture of characters living together under one roof, all things seem to be going well until Roy sleeps with Peel's Korean neighbor and crush, CHUN-JA. Feeling lost and betrayed, Peel ventures off to find his long lost brothers. From New Mexico to Las Vegas, Peel starts to learn that there’s a whole world out there and everything his mother had told him about his father and brothers was a lie. In the end, Peel finds a family that he never knew he was missing.
Here’s a link to a short film I made with the same character, different story: http://www.vimeo.com/1317116
Comments (11)
Mary Beth Verhunce This is sooooo original! A brilliant concept!
March 18, 2010Mark Moen Like the others, I was impressed with your pitch video, but since this isn't the director part of the competition, I have to grade you on your synopsis and script sample. Your overall premise is promising. I think the dynamics of having four very different and odd personalities in one house (all male) could lead to some funny situations. It would also be easy to shoot, which I'm sure was your intention when you wrote it. If your script isn't selected, you should shoot it yourself Gonzo style. Don't wait for others to help you, help yourself!
March 17, 2010Dale Evans Hands down, this is the best pitch video I've watched so far. Nice production values. The script sample wasn't laugh out loud funny, but it held my attention, which is more than I can say for some of the other scripts I've read on here. It sounds like the film could be made on a low budget, which probably helps your chances, as I imagine Lionsgate wouldn't want to gamble too much money on a script discovered in an online contest. I'll give you 5 stars for the video alone.
March 16, 2010Elena Kim I like the basic concept. The lead character is somewhat of a man-child, which has been a staple of comedies going all the way back to silent films. I liked the contrast between the two characters in the script sample, but it might have been better to use a scene with all the roommates, so we could see how they all interact. I agree with the others, the pitch video is well made, and it doesn’t hurt your cause. Best of luck.
March 16, 2010Ervin Anderson I can see what you're going for, but mostly I just felt sorry for the main character. I didn't find much humor here. Maybe with the right actors it could be funny, but the sample script pages didn't give me much to work with comedy-wise. The video was quite good, though.
March 12, 2010William Stephens Um, isn't this contest to get the winning pitch made into a short film? This IS already a short film. What, you just want to make it again. POINTLESS!
March 12, 2010Lee Karaim Hey Williiam, I only made the short film because I wanted to turn it into a feature. I pulled this is from the Incubator FAQ page, "The ultimate goal of the Lionsgate Incubator is to develop original film ideas that can be grown into feature films using Lionsgate's development and production resources".
March 12, 2010William Stephens Well, I read something totally different, but then again, I don't think this contest has it's shit together in the slightest. The concept pitch part of the contest has been over for 4 days now and still no indication of the winner yet(nor have they announced when that will be). Hell, the director's pitches start in less than a week, and they still don't have anything to go off of. :[
March 12, 2010Robert Dobbins Looks like a wanna-be "Napoleon Dynamite", but not nearly as funny... kinda looks boring in fact.
March 12, 2010Lee Karaim My lead character is 35 years old and the plot is not even similar, but I guess things could be worse than having someone compare your idea to the most profitable low budget comedy of all time.
March 12, 2010Robert Dobbins Yeah well, I could compare a movie with a robot in it, to "Transformers", but that doesn't mean it'll be as successful. ;)
March 12, 2010Heather Smith One of the better pitch videos on here. The scene sample had some funny lines. For this kind of low key, awkward humor to work, you have to be careful not to go over the top, and I don’t think it did. The story seems well structured. Nice work.
March 12, 2010Hywel Berry Very nice pitch video. It's difficult to mix a trailer with a pitch and not come off as confused or irritating, but you achieved it.
March 8, 2010The script sample also works really well. It's a very difficult tone to hit but you've nailed it perfectly. Well done and good luck.
Evan Wake Really excellent and well thought out characters. I especially like that you give the protagonist clear and definable goals right from the start. I definitely see an interesting arc happening over the course of the story for the protagonist. Would like to see more.
March 8, 2010Sam Bardley Well done. I'd watch a feature length film with this plot.
March 16, 2010