Serial Killers Anonymous
A man joins a self-help group for people with murderous thoughts, falls in love, and tries to stop a real serial killer who may be a member of the group
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The Impossible Switch
A man falls in love with his girlfriend's roommate, and hatches a plan to make the switch.
Randy Black is just an average guy. Recently divorced. Good looking. Great career. The only thing that makes Randy different from everyone else is, occasioanlly, he has murderous thoughts. He once caught his wife cheating on him with his personal trainer behind a movie theater, and, since he happened to be carrying a very large knife, decided that he was going to kill his wife and her lover. But he just couldn't do it. Oh, he was GOING TO, but he tripped and stabbed himself in the leg by accident.
That's when Randy realized he needed help. So he joined a self-help group, Serial Killers Anonymous. It's a small group, littered with decent people who occasionally get the urge to murder people. One night at group, while telling the story of how he nearly pulled an O.J. on his wife, Randy meets an beguiling lunatic named Heather. She's beautiful, funny, and completely off her rocker. Heather is a sex addict. A chronic liar. And she smokes, too. Still, there's undeniable chemistry between Randy and Heather. That first night, they end up sleeping together. Well, not SLEEPING exactly, since they're both kind of afraid of getting murdered. So, they have sex and stay up all night with each other. It's love. Or as close to love as two people with murderous thoughts can have for one another.
Soon, fear begins to spread throughout the city. A serial killer is on the loose. People are being murdered on a weekly basis. Once they figured out that the murderer in not either of them, Heather and Randy team-up to find the killer, whom they suspect is a member of their fun little group.
Can they find the killer? Will they live happily ever after and not murder each other? Of course. It's a movie. A really fucking funny, dark, stange one.
Dont' you want to see how it all ends?
I sure do. And I even know what happens.
That's when Randy realized he needed help. So he joined a self-help group, Serial Killers Anonymous. It's a small group, littered with decent people who occasionally get the urge to murder people. One night at group, while telling the story of how he nearly pulled an O.J. on his wife, Randy meets an beguiling lunatic named Heather. She's beautiful, funny, and completely off her rocker. Heather is a sex addict. A chronic liar. And she smokes, too. Still, there's undeniable chemistry between Randy and Heather. That first night, they end up sleeping together. Well, not SLEEPING exactly, since they're both kind of afraid of getting murdered. So, they have sex and stay up all night with each other. It's love. Or as close to love as two people with murderous thoughts can have for one another.
Soon, fear begins to spread throughout the city. A serial killer is on the loose. People are being murdered on a weekly basis. Once they figured out that the murderer in not either of them, Heather and Randy team-up to find the killer, whom they suspect is a member of their fun little group.
Can they find the killer? Will they live happily ever after and not murder each other? Of course. It's a movie. A really fucking funny, dark, stange one.
Dont' you want to see how it all ends?
I sure do. And I even know what happens.
Comments (3)
Joey Biagio Heya! :],
March 10, 2010first things first: I LOVE the story. But the synopsis sounds like a mix between Fight Club meets The Serial Killers Club. Look into the second one, so that you don't accidentally step on anyone's toes ( http://www.amazon.com/Serial-Killers-Club-Jeff-Povey/dp/0446578428 )
The intro works. I tend to resort to the same Voice over style in my openers as well :], so maybe I'm a tad biased?
The concept works. That's the most important thing here.
The dialogue feels a tiny bit rushed, like you're trying to get a lot of information out in five pages...which I understand...this being a five page max rule and all. But I'd...take my time...have my characters side track a little in their dialogue. You don't have to rush them ;) having them take their time builds up suspense.
Ervin Anderson Hey, looking at the link to Serial Killers Club, it seems like that book is about a group of serial killers who meet-up....my script is about a group of people who have murderous thoughts, but aren't killers (well, maybe ONE of them is). But thanks, Joey, for the awesome words. I appreciate it!
March 11, 2010Bradford Richardson Ervin, you've got a GREAT idea here! It just needs a bit of story-structure tweaking. Have you seen YOU KILL ME? You'll love it. First, the real serial killer needs to already be stalking the city. Electrifying everyone's curiosity, subconscious and fear. Randy is just like everyone else in harboring homicidal fantasies, but his fantasies are increasingly dark, comical, and worrying him enough to seek group help. Plus, use your brief character introductions to reveal inner-character. We learn nothing from blonde, pretty or handsome. Stylish, begins to reveal that Derek is a player. But who is, Willa, at heart. And, every character deserves a first name, but only use last names if it's pivotal to the story. Have you read, Blake Snyder's SAVE THE CAT STRIKES BACK, and SAVE THE CAT GOES TO THE MOVIES? Please do. You'll thank me.
March 10, 2010Ervin Anderson Thanks for the thoughtful review! Every character introduced in the sample will be important to the story, hence the last names. I haven't read Blake Snyder's books, but I've read the William Goldman books, which I HIGHLY recommend. But, yeah, thank you for reading it!
March 11, 2010Todd Bell Great premise, Great dialogue....Could make a good movie.....maybe?
March 9, 2010Todd Bell Thanks...maybe?
March 9, 2010Todd Bell Maybe?
March 9, 2010Todd Bell ?
March 9, 2010Ervin Anderson Thanks for reading it, if you did.
March 9, 2010