The Last Hitler

Sigfried Seeliger I think it's a strong simple concept, but you need to add a level of difficulty to up the ante. I agree with many on here that it's a good short film or sketch, but needs to move on from that. I think the writing is clear and concise.

Kase T. Gunn I think this idea has the potential to be really funny. As a response to the gentleman's issue below regarding the last descendant conundrum, why not just have the guy be a descendant of Hitler instead of the LAST descendant? Wouldn't the set up still work?

Daniel Kramer The only reason I left off a star is because we don't get a great sense of the movie beyond the first act. But...

It's a really funny premise. The problem of him being the last descendant can be solved very easily. You can make him adopted or have the dad die to name two. Love your sample. You left me wanting more. Good luck.

J. Alex Boyd It actually has a few funny jokes in it, which is something I can say about regrettably few scripts on this website.

But here's the problem. And it's a big problem. MUCH bigger than the "you're" instead of "your" on the last page (And that's a pretty big problem).

HOW CAN HE BE THE LAST LIVING DESCENDANT OF HITLER IF HIS FATHER'S ALIVE, AND ALSO A DESCENDANT OF HITLER?

HOW?

GOD DAMMIT. PAY ATTENTION TO YOUR OWN CONCEPT.

Ahem. Sorry. I'm so sorry. I get like that sometime.

I didn't give you two stars for an egregious logic problem, though. I just don't think this script can survive longer than these pages. While you have shown that you're capable of not bad jokes (In particular the technicians not joking, except with wordplay and puns, which is a type of wordplay), the comical misunderstandings would get kinda old after this point. I like that he mishears "Furious", I like that he sees Hitler in everything, but I wouldn't watch two hours of it.

Bull Shark great idea, funny concept... but hollywood would never make this..unless adam gets assassinated by brad pitt

Christopher Hewitson Good writing and great plot. I would love to see this get made. You should conisder filming it on your own if you don't win.

Amanda Bowen I really like this concept. I'm with Justin - I'd like the lab scene to be a bit longer. Love the chromosome poster gag, but I'd like to see the "Don't order me around" bit expressed just a little more fully. It's so quick, and while funny, I think it could be more humorous if expanded just a little - a tad more force, a bit more uncomfortableness.. Great, funny idea overall, and well written.

Steven Kahler This is a perfect example for those who have had no idea what I am talking about when I rant on about undeserved misfortune! Do you see now? Excellent.

This needs work in many areas but it has great potential as a writing sample.

The synopsis is good and shows beginning, middle and end and expresses clearly both inner and outer complications for the hero and clearly shows a blueprint for achieving a measure of depth to the hero's plight so watch your arcs.

It needs to be punched up considerably in the area of cinematic movement to reach its full potential.

Altogether -- not bad.

Matt Hobby Full disclosure: I improvise with Nikhil. Also under full disclosure: he's funnier than me, and it shows in this hilarious idea.

Great scene, great writing. Well done, bud!

Dexter Dexington This is the best idea on here. Great premise, good jokes, it's a lot of fun. I hope you win, I really do. Took down one star, though, because your synopsis didn't tell me enough. I wanna know how the story ends, dude!