Trinity

Three childhood friends hit hard by the recession set up a for-profit spiritual center in an effort to reclaim their fortunes.

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Vaishali Grover

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Three successful childhood friends, MATT, ELI, and ROSHAN are hit hard by the recession and have to return to their parents' New England homes to regroup. Not much has changed since their childhood – MATT is still helping ELI and ROSHAN out of their complicated schemes gone awry. MATT covers for his friends because they are fundamentally good people who can't resist a harebrained scam. After meeting up at a neighborhood barbecue, ROSHAN and ELI grudgingly admit that ROSHAN's hedge fund went bankrupt and ELI's real estate business went down with the real estate bubble. MATT openly left his trusteeship on the board of a southern Church, New Hope, when he learned that the Church was embroiled in an embezzlement scheme. What MATT sees as complete corruption, ELI and ROSHAN view as an opportunity to reclaim their fortunes—they want to set up a Church of as a “for profit non-profit.”
MATT soon changes his mind when he finds out that the New Hope founders have framed him in the embezzlement scheme. He agrees to help ELI and ROSHAN set up a church if they help clear his name and invest a portion of their profits in legitimate community projects. The three set out to create the “ Trinity Center of Mind, Body and Soul” capitalizing on the new age spiritual fads in the New England suburbs. MATT focuses on developing the doctrine of the Spiritual Center, while ROSHAN spearheads fundraising and ELI finds a location. Unfortunately, ROSHAN finds that all of his hedge fund buddies are also broke and the best venue ELI can come up with is his parents’ pool house. Despite the odds, MATT finds success with a small congregation as members of book clubs and the local elite are drawn to his enthusiasm. Because of their unique facilities, ELI and ROSHAN, start offering spa services and spiritual bath products as part of the religious services with the motto, “Spiritual enlightenment while all your tension is worked out.” The three friends move into the Spiritual Center when members of the congregation begin calling on them for advice and services at all hours of the night.
When ELI's ultra-conservative parents return home, they believe they have stumbled on some sort of lavish debauchery. But when the MATT explains the concept, ELI's parents are so relieved that ELI is not an atheist that they invest in the venture and write off the pool house as church property. The parents start spreading the word in the older community. As the center grows, MATT becomes the face of “Trinity.” Meanwhile, ROSHAN and ELI get caught up with the success of their church and stall pursuing MATT's acquittal. For legal protection, ROSHAN and ELI keep MATT's name off of the official center documents because connecting MATT to the southern embezzlement scheme would ruin “Trinity's” image, but this detail is kept from MATT.
When an IRS agent, EMMA, comes to investigate the new center's spiritual claims, she finds the three founding fathers rather young and their new age tenants suspicious. Although her first goal is to expose the Church as a “for-profit non-profit” she grows closer to MATT and begins to see that the spa cum spiritual center has a positive effect on the community. Still, she finds it strange that MATT is not a legal founder of the Center and uncovers his connection to the embezzlement controversy. MATT feels completely betrayed when he learns that ROSHAN and ELI did not help him in spite of the countless times he got them out of trouble. He threatens to testify against them and his old Church in order to get immunity. Knowing that MATT won't listen to them, ROSHAN and ELI turn to EMMA to prove that the center is creatively legitimate; she is astounded by how they are been able successfully leverage so many legal loopholes. They also present her with a thorough analysis of Matthew’s case and a strong paper trail indicting the New Hope Minister. The three friends reconcile and ROSHAN and ELI hatch another scheme: franchising the church.

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Seeta Grover I find the story captivating because it deals with the real life issues of the recession and money problems, but the the writing is injected with humor. The reader can identify with the characters and you become invested in their stories. You simply want to read MORE.

I love the idea of taking a Church and selling salvation as a service! What a commodity to sell!

March 19, 2010

Kim Peitso I really like the concept and think it would work well for these times while still remaining timeless. I feel like you have already developed Eli's and Matt's personalities very well, but Roshan seems the weakest––I don't feel like I can go out and have drinks with him yet. You might want to spend more time getting to know him so that some more of his traits come across more strongly in the opening pages.

I LOVE that Eli's parents are super religious and already at age 10 he's rebelling with an evolution project! I definitely laughed at that.
One other small thing is that when Matt checked Eli for a tail, I can't see that coming across visually. You might consider adding some comment (like "unless you're hiding a tail there, monkey-man" or something) so that the audience knows Matt's not just checking out Eli's butt or making sure he didn't poop himself hahahaha.

Definitely looking forward to reading more!

March 19, 2010

Vaishali Grover Thanks for the suggestions. I see what you mean about Roshan - he seems more sidekicky in the childhood scene. I like the idea of Matt commenting on Eli's lack of tail. It fleshes him out so that he's more than a total goodie-goodie.

March 19, 2010

Nina Krek What I truly love about this is the care with which the characters were written, the timeliness of the idea and the fact that you already feel at home with the characters. The writing is excellent and I feel that the atmosphere and tone are perfectly set. Fantastic!

March 19, 2010

Vaishali Grover Thanks! I'm glad that the characters were likable and funny. I thought it would important to show how these friends got together and how their relationship hasn't changed that much throughout the years. Roshan and Eli are still scheming and Matt still has to get them out of their messes. Except this time, Matt is in a mess of his own!

March 19, 2010

Taylor McNulty This is great! I love the tone of your writing. I love the description of Eli,"who could sell dentures to a turtle." You get his character, while making it enjoyable for the readers to read. This idea has spunk and originality. I could visually see the kids getting into mischief, and it left me wanting more. Five stars.

March 9, 2010

Vaishali Grover Fantastic! It was important to me to also have an original trio. Roshan, Eli and Matt remind me of some of my best guy friends when they get into tangles of their own. I'm glad the personalities came across as it's sometimes tricky writing male characters that aren't one-dimensional and only out for personal gain or sex.

March 19, 2010