The Wanderer

TIB This is an awesome concept. I'd vote for this one!

Nick Francis Great concept. One of the more inspired pieces I've seen here, and the pitch video you added helps explain your vision very well. I actually think this could be pulled off within budget, as you are relying more on choreography and set design than effects. Good work and good luck! Take a look at my pitch as well, I think you'll appreciated the approach I've taken: http://massify.com/pitches/comingandgoing

Aaron Schnobrich I appreciate the cerebral, technical and artistic approach to your pitch. I am a big fan of moving sets and long ,choreographed shots. As mentioned above I'm curious as to how the jump cuts would affect the overall feel of the video.

Good luck to all of us ! !

Paul Wallace Thanks for the kind comments! As we all know from watching Star Wars I - III, unlimited budget = ruins the idea. I'm prepared to make this work even on a shoestring budget. Having such limitations will undoubtedly spur on further creativity - that is, unless we want to have a fully CG character...

CalvinsWagon I am always a fan of directors who take risks and this would be no different. Its a big, bold music video. Its obvious you spent time, effort and energy on this so thank you for making it interesting. My main concern would be budget. I'm not exactly sure what Massify/RSA are offering but to pull this off in the manner that you would want to would require some cost. However, I will say that many times budget restraints tend to lead to creative, innovative results. Best of luck!

Griff Wow, this is very well thought out. Desire, the woman of origin and destination, the 4 interesting time/location sets, boy and girl getting together at the end, etc.. This is very, very busy, and clearly the product of a very busy mind! You are a very bright and capable person, which can be best seen in the pitch video. Is there a Yale fraternity party in your past? I think there might!

The crescendo is heavy! I love it as a powerful presentation and conclusion. But, feasibility and budget may be a concern. There is a very dramatic narrative here, which I like. There is definitely a director of feature films at work here I think. As busy as this concept is, it works for me. Too many pitches are super-simple, with no coherent story.

Music videos should be a visual orgy in my mind, and you've got one here! Bravo! And good luck!

Bryan Yomjinda Very creative!

Paul Wallace Thanks so much for giving my pitch a read! I really appreciate your critique. I agree, that the jump-cuts will break the logic of the "pure" single take shot - however, I was using that aesthetic more as a structuring technique than as a rigid form. The main point of the "single-take" (and, it will most definitely be feigned) is to 1) establish a continuous sense of space, and 2) help reveal the set as sculptural. I think that the jump cuts will add more intrigue with its visual interest and its rhythm than take away with its cuts. But it's definitely something to keep in mind while filming - thanks!

sdshannon Wow, this is very ambitious. The one shot "master" is very difficult, I find that filmmakers seem to appreciate it more than audiences do, however I think in the way that you have the set structured, it can be a very visually stunning piece. The only concern is that staccato part you mentioned, if edited, could break that master shot illusion. Anyways, very creative idea. Good luck!

David Kim great idea!